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Sex: female
Join Date: May,
2008
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5/26/2008 10:51:06 PM
shit wut do i do, i wana do dis so bad but i cant cuz of da consequences, shit im jus mad i cant cry, i jus dont kno wut to do sum one help me pls lord if it aint you send sum1 to do it fo u cuz i dont wana do suntn, an lose my lil girl shes really da only one now, shes my world yea i get it i fukd up, but shit dis shit here is jus towe'up i really feel like dying an i kno is not my time, but i kina wish it would show up
im jus expressn wut im feelin yo, so yall welcomed to say wut yall gota say
i liked the concept u had here n all that, felt it coulda been a bit longer though just to get a better picture and more depth to the piece, also woulda liked to see a bit stronger of a rhyme scheme, make if flow a lil more, maybe make some of the multis a bit bigger then one or two syllables, but all in all a nice lil piece gurl, keep it up..
5/26/2008 10:51:06 PM
