Posts: 75
Sex: male
Join Date: Aug,
2008
Location:
retired
Favorite MC's:
eminem, 50 cent, lil wayne, jayz, rick ross
8/3/2008 12:12:48 PM
yo i blaze dro smoke sessions wit haetians wit no remorse- stayen high as fuck of course rippen out pauly shores vocalcords-
i quit school cuz all da damn drugs confusen started boosin jack infusen- these rhymes all an illusion likes kris angels dead wit a contusion-
i spit for days blazed off dis kushn haze eyes red n glazed like red n meth- the shit sprays like hollow tips on swollen lips n engagen green witout da seth-
been locked up more times than i care to remember from december to december- thats why im out on a mission wit a hustlers ambition for real no pretender-
i silently slay mimes like nine times just walken down the block wit no shoes or socks- straight up hate cops like to pull a 187 make them talk to they heart stops-
im new to dis area bringen diseased rhymes like molaria n hep c minue da hiv- dats whymy flows sickens on contact no need for a contract ill shine for free-
im da illest white cat since casper voice a little raspier n smooth like butter- cursed wit dis need to verbally murder those who bleed n they mother-
my rhymes leaven mcs sick in the head like shots fulla hot lead- no naz hip hop aint dead its a new era instead us new cats chasen bread
yo i blaze dro smoke sessions wit haetians wit no remorse- stayen high as fuck of course rippen out pauly shores vocalcords-
lol good lil rhyme only question i have is how did anything in that rhyme pertain to pauly shore? it didn't make sense..
quit school cuz all da damn drugs confusen started boosin jack infusen- these rhymes all an illusion likes kris angels dead wit a contusion-
These rhymes were forced it took away the effect of the flow..
i spit for days blazed off dis kushn haze eyes red n glazed like red n meth- the shit sprays like hollow tips on swollen lips n engagen green witout da seth-
The flow was forced on this it didn't hit...
been locked up more times than i care to remember from december to december- thats why im out on a mission wit a hustlers ambition for real no pretender-
The end didn't rhyme with anything ..and made it a bad bar..
i silently slay mimes like nine times just walken down the block wit no shoes or socks- straight up hate cops like to pull a 187 make them talk to they heart stops-
Your multies were off this could have been a better bar as well
im new to dis area bringen diseased rhymes like molaria n hep c minue da hiv- dats whymy flows sickens on contact no need for a contract ill shine for free-
im da illest white cat since casper voice a little raspier n smooth like butter- cursed wit dis need to verbally murder those who bleed n they mother-
lol...you a trip its apparent you need some work but thats why your here...you could have structured this better and rhymed mother with something..
my rhymes leaven mcs sick in the head like shots fulla hot lead- no naz hip hop aint dead its a new era instead us new cats chasen bread
This is probablly the best line overall
You need some work on your rhyming..your multi's...and your structure...and smoother wording for transitions... keep it up and Welcome to Six...keep spitting in a month or two you'll be alright
quote You need some work on your rhyming..your multi's...and your structure...and smoother wording for transitions... keep it up and Welcome to Six...keep spitting in a month or two you'll be alright
shit was strait but yea, forced...u get der in time, keep doin ya thang mane...
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